What do you think of this short scene from my book?

Hey! My friend is your friend. Haha! But she told me that you're a very good writer and I wanted to check your writing out so here it goes! I think you have really good potential for your age. You have a few spelling and grammar to work on which can be fixed with an editor so, with that aside, I think your writing is impecable. I'm 11, also a young writer, and have a lot of stuff to do so I promise I won't take your ideas. Do you think you can answer mine? I'd be grateful! http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=ApP2URo4tQei1vgig_opmeTsy6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20100204151738AAUhNqI